Without knowing what exactly you want to talk about in regards to discrimination or what examples you plan to use, it is difficult to make a specific suggestion about wording. However, here are some more general tips that might be helpful.
First, think about the examples you have chosen for this particular paragraph. You probably have two-three. Aside from discrimination, is there anything else that connects them? If so, what is it? You might be able to use that in the topic sentence. For example, each example might be whites discriminating against blacks. Or each example might be Christians discriminating against non-Christians. Or each example might be about the wealthy discriminating against the poor.
Second, if the examples are different types of discrimination, what is it you want to say about that? That discrimination is wide spread? Or it is too common? Think about the point you are trying to make about the discrimination.
Once you have determined all of this, you'll be able to craft a topic sentence than makes a strong claim. You'll also be doing a bit of brainstorming about some of the commentary you're going to need to provide later in the paragraph. You want to avoid simply listing examples of discrimination; instead, you want to provide the examples and then offer some commentary on their significance.
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